The Arrogance Of Eleanore

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Her hair she brushed / one hundred strokes

Until it shone of gold, / having suffered for her beauty.

She tied it with a strand of silk/ Eleanor preened half the night

Creamed her skin with Mother’s milk/ in preparation of her duty.

Her eyes were of the brightest hue/yet a smile false and tight

Not a glimmer of desire /no kindness did it show

As cold as cinder in the fire/as a torch without its amber glow.

Just in case it is new to you : How to read a Cleave. Read it vertically left, or bold in my case, then vertically right, or in italics, finally read the poem horizontally as a whole.

Jane Dougherty posted a poem called a ‘Cleave’ not having heard of a poem which is constructed in two halves but read as three pieces I just had to give it a crack… pardon the pun. Press Here to read Jane’s far superior Cleave and let her know what you think.

“How did I do?”

“Are you familiar with this form?”

Please comment I will respond soonest.

(if any one knows who to credit for this picture please let me know. )

30 thoughts on “The Arrogance Of Eleanore

    1. I was surprised at how many people didn’t know about this form and thrilled to be able to encourage people to have a go. I hope you give it a try and would love to read it if you do. ๐Ÿ˜‡

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  1. I like this form of poetry. You did really well – it goes good with the illustration.
    It’s an idea too to write an alternative to the work of great poets, but add our own as we don’ t like their (often sexist) point of view.

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      1. Why ‘almost there’? You’ve got two separate poems that add together to make a third poem that makes a bigger picture of the character. You could mess about with the odd word here and there, but the poem is there and it’s a good one. Makes me want to know about Eleonore. I only know the few cleave poems I’ve read on websites, and as far as I can see yours is as good as any and better than most.

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    1. Chris thank you for reading, when you try something new you are always afraid until the first comment is in. Please follow the link I put up, Jane has links to the original ‘How to cleave and origins) .

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