She rests her head, I examine her face
Her beauty buried beneath wear.
The folds of skin that crack the space
Where blushing cheeks once shone.
A beauty spot, faded lashes
Now translucent almost gone.
She rests, she rests her eyes
those eyes that have seen so much.
Reflected I see love in this face,
The skin that felt my youthful flesh.
That held my arm that time,
Proud to be seen there.
I said I would, I do and did.
She gave her life to me,
To cherish to love and pleasure
Then, now and forever.
Opening her clouded eyes I see fear,
As her mind refuses to know me.
Memories stolen never to return
I pray for her to rest those eyes
Once more.
In trying to experiment with finding my voice I put this together to see if I could be authentic when writing with a male perspective. Your comments would be appreciated thank you.
It touched me a lot and was very poignantly written, Ellen!
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Thank you for coming. 😇
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I enjoyed it! 😊
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Beautifully written. Love, commitment and sorrow, leaves me with a warm feeling, Until death due us part, isn’t that how it is suppose to be, I loved it. Kudos,,,
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This is incredibly touching, I think it’s less about gender and more about humanity. Loved it.
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Thank you I am pleased it touched the right spot. X
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What I deciphered is a voice emotionally laden with love and poignant feelings. I read it again after your note to decipher the male POV and it made a whole lot more sense to me than the first read. Well done 🙂
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I’d say this was very successful and moving. And in the difficult subject matter ….well the voice is a voice of love mingling with emotional pain. It almost doesn’t really matter whether it’s male or female.Well done.
Reminds me of a piece I read years ago called Terminal Days at Beverley Farm. (Can’t recall the author at the moment..)
All the best..Kris.
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Thank you for reading and your comments have made me blush… with pride. 😇
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