Emily took her helmet and silently slid the bifolds back to reveal the garden. Her once warm face received a blast. left with pink cheeks and a pinched nose which she wiggled as she fastened the helmet neath her chin. She closed the doors, pleased to have paid extra for the silent sliders. Emily heard the first birds of the day and spied a squirrel munching below the hazel. She filled her nostrils with Autumn, felt the frost in the air; mingled with wood-smoke in the wind. Emily marched down the path to the back of the cart lodge. A light caught the handlebars, a ribbon of anticipation bubbled in her chest she smiled to herself. Her leg thrown over the saddle and fingerless gloves took the chill from the grips; she was away.
Slowly, she passed the Beech hedge its copper leaves dangled precariously from the boughs. A row of horse-chestnuts were almost naked. The huge trees ran fifty yards down the length of the beech hedging, interspersed with red Hazel. Emily could only smile on such a day as this, she knew there was something magical in the air and had always loved the first ride of the season.
Oblivious to the crunch of leaves quickening behind her, or the raggedy breath wheezing puffs of cloudy air. She meandered, gazing at the sunrise and its colours spread over the fields.
She sensed danger rather than saw him, the taste of fear on her tongue. Emily peddled faster but as speed picked up, her bike was tugged hard. Over the handlebars, she drifted slow motion it seemed. The thud was the last thing she remembered as the world spun blue and green.
With a twist of her head, pain shot up her spine as the darkness enveloped her. She didn’t know what hit her. The lining of her nose stung with the scent of bitumen and burned wood. Prone on a bed of coal she lay, tears ran freely into her hair and her ears filled. One shake of her head cleared her ears but caused spasms of pain to ricochet into her toes. All she could see were sun rays bursting through the grid, way above her head.
The photo/ prompt is Sue Vincents #writephoto to be found here. The gif is taken from a short animated Oscar-winning film called ‘Father and daughter’ to be found on youtube.
My short is open to an ending or maybe it is the beginning of what?
A great short as it is, Ellen – or maybe an intriguing start to a novel? I’d read a book that started like that. Have a lovely easter holiday! xx
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Thanks for reading and leaving such a super comment. Happy easter Sara.
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Gosh dang-it; now I want to know what happened to her. I loved this piece of yours, Ellen. I swear I could feel the cool breeze and smell the smoke in the air. π
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I love comments like these thank you for reading it. Xx
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Loved it Ellen! So much mystery led!
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Thanks Ritu. X I wonder if one day I may grow it further.
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You should!!!
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I thought this was very good. I didn’t anticipate the change of direction, Ellen.
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I was a bit sneaky wasn’t I. π
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Wonderful and chilling writing, Ellen. Your descriptions paint such a rich and beautiful scene until all goes suddenly awry. I like it that the assailant isn’t identified. Scary!
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Thank you for those kind words. I enjoyed this. π
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Thank you Sue
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I sense she is a resourceful girl. There will be more. (K)
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There will be,.so dont forget to visit again.
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It sounds like the story has just begun. Now she has to find a way out.
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Hi Frank, yes the opening sequence of a longer short story I feel. Thankmyou for the visit.π
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I’m hooked! I had no idea as to what was coming and nearly stopped breathing as I read the last two paragraphs, Well done!
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Thank you Paul.
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intriguing…… what comes after????? this definitely the beginning of something
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~B
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Ah thank you for reading, This opener has thriller written all over the taster. I hope it brings you to read some more.π
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Absolutely !!!!
~B
PS I love a good thriller
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Definitely a beginning of a good story.
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I hope it will be a strong enough opening for a competition. It is good to be getting a few hours of clarity to use on my blog … even if my Manuscript has to wait for stronger and longer gaps before I can finish.
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Excellent you had me with youβ¦why stop there you could tell us more! π
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I can but not on the prompt… i am going to use it as a begining sequence. π€
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Brilliant
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Reblogged this on S C Richmond.
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So very kind my writing friend.
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It’s easy to share when the writing is great π Hope this finds you well and happy
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